At last, the correct version of this chapter... Sorry for posting the wrong one before. I don't know where my head's been at lately!
Hattie caught Mavis and Richard as they approached
the stairs.
"Er... Ann. Can I have a word? "
They stopped and looked back at her as she came to a
stop. There was something playful in Mavis's expression that looked incongruous
on Ann's face. Mavis didn't like it at all, especially considering what the
girl had said over breakfast. Lord Hurley wore his usual scowl of superior
disinterest. He was attractive enough and certainly rich, but Hattie didn't
really see why her sister would want to make a life with him.
"What is it?" asked Mavis. She made no
move to break away, instead hooking her hand through the hoop of Richard's
arm.
Hattie fumed. "I'm sorry Richard, but you don't
mind if I have a private word with my sister do you?"
"I have no secrets from my fience Hattie,"
said Mavis, smirking. "You can speak as free as ye like."
Richard raised his eyebrows in mild curiosity at the
attempted secrecy. He wouldn't have cared at all if there hadn't been a hint of
it.
"I wouldn't want to keep you from your packing
dear," said Hattie, touching his arm, and when she saw he still showed no
signs of going she lent in closer and whispered, "and it concerns subjects
gentlemen might do better to avoid... if you catch my meaning."
Richard's face went from pale to apple red in less
time than it took Hattie to stand back straight and he spluttered, pulling
immediately free from his apparent fiencee. "Er, right. Good. Well, I'll
leave you two ladies to your discussion then. Er, right. Yes." He made an
attempt to catch hold of his dignity; failed; tried again and this time
succeeded. He gave a curt little nod, his tight-lipped smile and then
withdrew.
Hattie glared at Mavis. Mavis looked brazenly back
at her and gave a whisper of a shrug as if to say, Well, what the hell? It was worth a try.
"What on Earth do you think you're doing?"
demanded Hattie.
"Playing the part. What does it look
like?" replied Mavis. "I'm Lady Ann."
"No you ruddy well aren't," snapped
Hattie, grabbing her arm and pulling her into the drawing room doorway with a
watchful glance to see if they could be overheard. "You're nothing but a
common girl playing dress-up. I'll thank you to remember who is in charge
here."
"I ain't forgotten. I'm just enjoying myself
while I've got the chance."
"What do you think you're doing, encouraging
Lord Hurley to take you away from here? I didn't say you could do that, did
I?"
Mavis opened her hands in a wide shrug.
"Where's the 'arm?"
"What?"
"Well think on it. You wanted to teach your
sister a lesson, right? Right now she's perfectly safe stuck in my body but I
can tell you that she ain't been living my life. She'll've been up rogering
Burt all night if I'm not wrong, which it ain't."
"How could you possibly know that?"
Mavis smirked. "You got eyes on ye. You ain't
dim. You have seen Burt and you're a woman. Don't tell me you haven't imagined
being with 'im yerself."
Hattie blushed and cleared her throat, thinking back
to the night on Griply Mount when Burt had propositioned her and how close
she'd come to letting him have his wicked way with her. "I don't know what
you mean."
Mavis gave a ragged chuckle. "Of course you do.
But what I'm saying is that you wanted to teach er a lesson and so far all
she's ad is the best bits. Think about it." Mavis stepped closer. "If
I stayed this way for a while longer; say a week in that town Nockton, while
she's stuck ere, she'll have to just go on and live my life. One week - that's
all it would be - and in that time she'd learn a lesson she'd never
forget."
Hattie stared at her flashing eyes, her grinning
mouth, and she allowed herself the pleasure of measuring that out in her mind;
playing the scenario through: her sister stuck in the life of a peasant barmaid;
forced to tend bar and possibly even service the men of the village.
How delightful would that be in its terrible
beauty?
"It would be perfectly safe," said Mavis.
"She lives my life here while I go to Nockton with Lord Hurley. In a
week's time I return and we swap back. And it would be nice for me; I won't
deny that. It would be... a holiday."
Hattie stepped back and regarded Mavis thoughtfully.
It was remarkable how like the real Ann she was already in her poise and
manner. She would be able to pull off the charade perfectly well, Hattie was
sure of it. And the real Ann, if that even was the original Ann... What of her?
She would certainly get her just desserts.
Mavis smirked, seeing the mental cogs turning.
"What do you think then?" she asked. "Do you want to really
teach her a lesson? Or would you prefer to let her have every
advantage?"
Hattie came to a decision. "Alright then. Yes.
I agree. One week and no more." She raised her finger. "No more, do
you understand?"
"Of course," replied Macis. "I'll
have had more than enough fun from it by then. And don't worry." She
smiled sweetly. "You can trust me."
They shook hands and with another little smirk, Mavis started up
the stairs, leaving Hattie to her thoughts.
The strumpet was right. It was more than a shame to cut Ann's
penance short just as it was starting. Where was the fun in that.
And it got her to thinking about the other ideas she had started to
formulate. Her initial ideas had been quite transitory and brief, but perhaps
she should give some thought to raising the stakes there too. She was tired of
being a second class citizen in her own family. It was long last time she
taught all of them a lesson that they would never... ever... forget.
I think you posted part charpter five part three a second time
ReplyDeleteDamn it! Give me some time and I'll fix it!
DeleteWell, here I am, all caught up, and treated to a perfect parody and panoply of passion!
ReplyDeleteYou been partying, girlfriend? ;-)
Finntasia x
Only the tilte of the Chapter has changed. The text is same as LADY ANN'S FOLLY: Chapter Five - Part three
ReplyDeleteit was a lovely part :-) I was happy to read it again - MikeW
ReplyDeletewith all the hard work you have been doing and burning the candle at both ends you are allowed to make a small mistake like this plus it was good to read it again.
ReplyDeleteRob
I second that, its a nice refresher.
Delete(Heart-warmed smile)
DeleteThanks Finnsters. I guess my brain is still a bit frazzled. Living out of a suitcase can do that to a girl. Having said that, when I finally get access to a computer again I will resolve this problem post-haste.
The minute this damnable play finishes and I can finally get my head back in the game, I'm really looking forward to being able to put my focus back where destiny wishes it to be. That'll mean more Lady Ann (and we're approaching the bit where it starts to get good) and a publication of Cleaner Volume 1 (when I can finally finish writing it).
As always, you will never truly know how much your support and enjoyment means to me. I can barely grasp how happy it makes me myself.
it is a great deal of enjoyment from our end.
ReplyDelete"just one week and no more" like a holiday? I love it!
one thing I am curious about: did Hattie figure out the Ann/Burt switch or is it more of a "what if" thought?
Hey. I was hoping you would notice that holiday reference. It's still a bit inelegant so I might work it for the book version.
DeleteHattie strongly suspects but isn't sure.
Glad you're enjoying it.
I'm loving it. its no longer incest in any sense, but I was wondering if she realized the Burt in question was "related".
DeleteIs the bottom half still part three?
I guess we'll find out in future.
DeleteThanks for pointing that error again. I don't know where my head's been at lately. Things WILL calm down soon!
Love this bit mavis might not come back from nockton and hattie suspects that anne might not be who she seems to be and she is starting to form plans herself
ReplyDeleterob
Well fortunately, without the pendant, Hattie has limited ability to take action.
Deleteyes but she knows who has the pendant and little sisters can be very vindictive if they feel that they have been wronged
DeleteRob
Surely not!
DeleteFrom past experience yes if they are feeling put down
DeleteRob
Well... we'll have to wait and see.
DeleteThis is going to be so delicious
DeleteRob
one of the things I love about this story (including the original) is the Finn classic of power dynamics. the person you think is in control probably isn't and events take on a power of there own. between Hattie Mavis and Ann, already Mavis has assumed almost complete control. what will happen as she loses her self assurance though? I for one can't wait. consider this me literally GAGGING for more! :)
ReplyDeleteYeah. You've hit the nail on the head there John. It's all about the shifting power.
DeleteI don't see Mavis about to lose her self-assurance... To me it seems like she's presenting with the best of both worlds; newfound privilege and power coupled with Bolshy bar girl attitude. I love her in this.
ReplyDeleteabsolutely, but just wait till memories start swapping. she'll be a prissy useless bitch before you know it.
DeleteHey John, it's interesting how you see Ann. It makes me wonder how I see her. I realise I haven't really stood back to define her in that way. (Thinks) I may have to get back to you on that. I so think that the former persona provides some long term influence. The Burt Ann who ends LA1 is different from the original bratty Ann, though she has some character development yet to come.
DeleteAnd Dandelion, I share your enjoyment of Mavis and her new potency. Unexpected on my part but lovely to watch from behind these eyes.
Maybe im being too harsh, its just if you look at her reactions, she has a mountain of confidence and certain expectations, but when things deviate from those expectations she isn't able to adapt.
DeleteYeah. You're right. I see the characters in different ways. Lady Ann is like a costume you can put on that influences the way you act, the more time you spend in it. I see the characters who wear this costume as individuals with their own personal development and story arcs.
DeleteSo the original Burt became Ann and has now turned into Mavis, but it's still the same character, really an amalgamation of the different forms he has possessed.
Oh yeah and nice one about the gagging :)
ReplyDeleteEmma.... Hint hint :)
Hmmm... (Looks thoughtful)
DeleteWho needs an actual gag when you have burts powerful arms and large working man's hands?
DeleteI might leave Dandelion to answer that...
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