Tuesday 3 June 2014

Cleaner: Chapter One - Part Seven



DAHLIA


As the dress fully settled into place, Melissa’s faint mix of fairly neutral perfume and body scent enclosed me too. That sense of really becoming her came to me again along with the same accompanying shiver of arousal.

What was I like? I’d never realised how kinky I could be!

I had a very tall and broad antique tilting mirror and Melissa was already examining her reflection in it. I stepped up beside her, looking at the tent-like outfit on my own body. It made me look curiously out of scale; as though I were a little girl again, playing dress up in her mother’s clothes.

We looked at one another in the reflection and neither one of us could help growing a goofy grin of ridiculous collusion. Then we laughed and became, for the length of it, equals. Thinking that made me wonder how it would feel to be the inferior half of that equation, to take on the submissive role, and that shimmer of titillation came back, amazing me, but delighting me too. And of course I was kind of taking on that submissive role right now. In the realm of my imagination, Melissa had become the employer; I the subservient cleaner.

When our giggles subsided the moment became uncomfortable instead so I broke the tension, reaching for her shoes, relieved to see that they were my size, though slightly roomy; a wide fitting to account for her chubby feet. They would do for moving around the house in and I wanted to get as close as I could to the proper effect. I sat on the foot of my bed, setting the shoes down in front of me.

It reminded me of the concept of stepping into someone else’s shoes and for some reason that didn’t bring on a squeeze of sexual pleasure but dread instead. In fact it revived a memory I didn’t even know I had of a dream; a nightmare; in which a decision had been made – one I couldn’t remember now. A decision had been made and there had been no going back from it. Not ever. That nightmare memory came back clearly but only so far as the feelings it claustrophobia it had instilled. I could recall nothing more of it.

But I was being silly. I was only putting on a pair of shoes. There was no trap here.

I slipped first one foot in, then the other, looking down at the oval of smooth flesh framed by the matching blue.

With that, the transformation was complete.

I stood up and admired my strange reflection, wishing again that it wasn’t just the clothes we had swapped. How incredible would it be to really swap bodies for the morning as well?

I smiled at myself then noticed that Melissa was waiting and turned to face her.

“What happens now?” she asked.

My mind blanked. I really wasn’t sure exactly. My fantasy had been for her to lounge by the pool while I worked but now it was upon me I couldn’t bear the idea of her witnessing my strange game. I felt bad chickening out but we could always do it again, properly that time.

“Uh, well, do you mind staying up here actually?” I said. “You could sit on the bed and watch TV.” I had a screen fixed to the wall that was almost as big as the monster downstairs.

She looked at it and then the bed and shrugged. “Oh. Okay. For how long?”

“Until twelve thirty? The end of your shift?”

“Okay.”

There was another awkward moment. I was realising now just how screwed up this was. My face went bright red. But I was still determined to go through with it. I'd be an idiot to back out now. I was worried Melissa might sell the story to the papers or something, but I had more than enough wealth to give her a financial incentive to keep it quiet. I’d offer that before she went home.

“Alright then,” I said. “Let’s get to it.”

“Yes,” replied Melissa, an odd expression on her face. “Lets.”






18 comments:

  1. Be careful what you wish for as it might come true

    Rob

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  2. Big fan of this story..
    Is it anywhere you have postet the completed one?

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    1. Do you mean the original much shorter version? If so, yes. On Fictionmania.

      Or the rest of this extended edition? Not finished yet by far. I've completed the first chapter but will be publishing it on Amazon when I'm done.

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  3. Just a suggestion. Would you consider the option of putting Dahlia in a proper maid's uniform? Nothing fancy, just a working polycoton dress and apron and probably a small cap? That would emphasise and enhance even more the difference in social status of the two women and make Melissa feel more confortable in her new elevated status.
    I love your story of course and I love the slow pace in it. It is so psychologically correct.
    Looking forward to the next chapters.
    Monica G

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    1. Hmmm...

      I did consider this and it is possible. I wasn't leaning toward doing it as it's "Cleaner" rather than "Maid" (which I've just added to my list to write sometime in the future).

      I know that some readers would really like that but I'm not sure it's right for this story.

      Having said that, I wouldn't be surprised if some kind of uniform or distinctive outfit is involved at some point...

      I'm glad you're enjoying the pace (which I was concerned about). Keep reading!

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    2. Thank you for answering me so promptly!
      I know that in today's world an average cleaner is working in a T shirt and shorts, but I can assure you that in parts of Continental Europe and especially in richer homes the cleaning lady who comes for a day's work is required to change into something more appropriate for her work like a dress overall or smock or 'blouse' like they call it in France usually a front buttoning frock with or without apron depending on the Mistress of the house.
      Monica G

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    3. Yeah, I always reply within a couple of hours if I'm awake.

      I'll certainly consider it. It won't be a classic maid's costume but there may well be something.

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    4. Love the pace of this. The way we feel every thought along with Dahlia is sublime. Her inner reserve throwing up last chances to back out, versus her in-the-moment bid for a kinky rush.

      Would love to know more about Dahlia's profound, yet half-forgotten discomfiture at slipping into another pair of shoes... what changes have happened in her life before...? after all this is Nockton Vale...

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    5. Ooo, thanks Dandelion. Yeah, I'm enjoying the pace too now it's trundling along.

      I'm not sure she's done this before. That reference to putting on another's shoes is just her considering the saying. It looks like she'll get the chance to explore the idea at a more intimate level from now on though...

      The original story didn't have this overt kinkiness. Dahlia didn't admit to herself that this was why she was doing it. It's interesting getting right into her head this time.

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  4. I hate to disagree, but I have to. In this case, one of the elements of the swap that appeals to Dahlia is the anonymity of being Melissa. she becomes a household appliance almost. A maid's uniform would be putting her on display and while it could be humiliating it doesn't have the same element of becoming part of the background.

    John
    PS I like the bit with the shoes. no matter how different they are or what is or isn't about to happen their feet are essentially the same size and they can wear the same shoes now, so presumably they would be able to wear the same shoes a year from "now". somethings never change, no matter how much change there is. ;)

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    1. You said it. Actually the shoes scene in the original story is quite pivotal and actually existed because ten years ago, when I wrote it, one of my original readers of the serial really liked the imagery of feminine feet and asked me to put in a little emphasis. I guess I'm still honouring that request all these years later.

      That same person co-wrote one of the best stories on Fictionmania so go and check it out: the rather saucily named, What Goes Around, Cums Around.

      http://fictionmania.tv/stories/readtextstory.html?storyID=29787934934759

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  5. I have to agree with John dahlia wants to go unnoticed and by putting on any kind of uniform she stands out.

    Rob

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    1. I think in the end it will be Dahlia who decides. These decisions tend to take place in the heat of the moment, when the characters themselves are speaking through my typing fingers. At the appropriate moment Dahlia will make a choice and I will do my best to keep up.

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    2. Unless Melissa decides to apply some pressure

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    3. (Grins)

      I like the idea of that and could see it happening...

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  6. For a blissful moment, I thought that Dahlia had once been someone else, but the resulting comments dashed my hopes of another of your clever little links.
    It would've been really cool.

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    1. Oh no. Cleaner is strictly a no magic story!

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