tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post153904427697619071..comments2023-10-26T09:25:58.049+01:00Comments on Emma Finn's Dark Tales of Transformation: CLEANER II: Chapter Six - Part One Emma Finnhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02026867289162806363noreply@blogger.comBlogger30125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-31656329023122025312016-01-30T22:22:17.503+00:002016-01-30T22:22:17.503+00:00I think "dark ending" is everyone can fo...I think "dark ending" is everyone can forecast, I don't hate either dark or happy ending. But I like surprise, no matter dark or happy, keep surprise will make novel more attractive.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-15542743004901563992016-01-29T15:46:05.757+00:002016-01-29T15:46:05.757+00:00I can imagine a finish where it appears the switch...I can imagine a finish where it appears the switch will remain in place. Melissa as Dahlia is a more successful hotter model than ever, Dahlia as Melissa is more working class, drunk, smoker, of course fatter and worse eyesight, and wallowing in it...until out of the blue they are exposed and instantly end up on the cover of every tabloid/trash mag. :) Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-9857535629468902112016-01-28T16:41:22.223+00:002016-01-28T16:41:22.223+00:00Keep wishing. Maybe it will come true. Keep wishing. Maybe it will come true. Emma Finnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02026867289162806363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-79181716667224628862016-01-28T02:10:13.201+00:002016-01-28T02:10:13.201+00:00I'm with Marc...gotta be a dark ending!!!
--R...I'm with Marc...gotta be a dark ending!!!<br /><br />--RobertAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-25454814735514794332016-01-27T20:23:06.243+00:002016-01-27T20:23:06.243+00:00It sure seems that way. It sure seems that way. Emma Finnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02026867289162806363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-59565618669774152462016-01-27T20:22:46.986+00:002016-01-27T20:22:46.986+00:00(Shakes head fondly)
We'll see.(Shakes head fondly) <br /><br />We'll see. Emma Finnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02026867289162806363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-23583019485820602032016-01-27T19:02:13.082+00:002016-01-27T19:02:13.082+00:00No...please not... no happy ending here... It is s...No...please not... no happy ending here... It is simply not fair to let Dahlia act out her kinky desires in books 1 and 2 of the trilogy, then let her simply get away with it after finally losing control of the swap. If you are really serious about letting M become the victim of her own ambitions and D riding victorious into the sunset, please at least offer us "dark ending"-lovers an alternative finale (so we can imagine the alternative to be the real thing).<br />Please.....!!!! ;-)<br /><br />marc Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-62027879342513356672016-01-27T13:27:17.485+00:002016-01-27T13:27:17.485+00:00I like happy none dark ending though of course dar...I like happy none dark ending though of course dark ones are more dramatic. Though in the case of the cleaner I donn't see much hope for anything but a dark ending, poor foolish Dahlia seems hell bent on destroying & punishing herself & Melissa is all too happy to 'Help' her.eotten2001https://www.blogger.com/profile/15037344663933155088noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-49211534660473735432016-01-27T10:18:00.652+00:002016-01-27T10:18:00.652+00:00A non dark ending? I'll have to think about th...A non dark ending? I'll have to think about that. <br /><br />In fact my novels don't always have dark endings. It's the short stories that are more likely to. Anything could happen here. Emma Finnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02026867289162806363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-23768149047045497582016-01-27T05:11:11.048+00:002016-01-27T05:11:11.048+00:00Thank you Emma, hope you getting better and better...Thank you Emma, hope you getting better and better. I like the tension you created, usually the ending is dark, but maybe you can give an alternative one like the real D use her fingerprint to open a box in bank and eventually beat real and almost successful M... then... everyone is in dark...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-64771069388967110272016-01-26T17:10:11.859+00:002016-01-26T17:10:11.859+00:00Yeah. I love that aspect of these stories. Yeah. I love that aspect of these stories. Emma Finnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02026867289162806363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-44685236510443905522016-01-26T14:25:20.043+00:002016-01-26T14:25:20.043+00:00Another thougth has occured to me. Tey've been...Another thougth has occured to me. Tey've been pretnding to beeach other for many months now, gotten used to their new names. D would not turn now if addressed by her former name &neither would Melissa. LOL They settled in too much to make it almost to return. Would D even reaalize that Dahlia should be her name? Automaticall she now calls the real M 'Miss Western & answers to Melissa - even is used to obeying when M or anyone else calls her Melissa. Its an intertesting aspect of Identity.eotten2001https://www.blogger.com/profile/15037344663933155088noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-35164506598007628172016-01-26T07:41:59.005+00:002016-01-26T07:41:59.005+00:00Thanks buddy. Thanks buddy. Emma Finnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02026867289162806363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-9348334855334073122016-01-26T07:41:40.351+00:002016-01-26T07:41:40.351+00:00Yes you must! It won't be too long hopefully.Yes you must! It won't be too long hopefully. Emma Finnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02026867289162806363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-76174781134608815912016-01-26T00:21:09.635+00:002016-01-26T00:21:09.635+00:00that thrill at being disgusting to others always g...that thrill at being disgusting to others always gives me chills. there is something powerfully disturbing about that kind of self loathing. well done Emma. I hope you are well. Johnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17491333318454995808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-59499006607961848812016-01-25T19:59:50.494+00:002016-01-25T19:59:50.494+00:00Welcome back, Emma! You've come back with dev...Welcome back, Emma! You've come back with devilish gusto! <br />Loved the chapter. I think that Melissa has been up to no good for the three weeks Dahlia has been out of contact, but, we will have to wait and see. The tension is palpable. <br />The psychological aspects of this story have me enthralled. It's interesting how Emma is able to delve into the characters' minds as they immerse themselves into another person's life. To Melissa, Dahlia's life is like a drug that she cannot get enough of and will do anything to keep. To Dahlia it seems that Melissa life is a way to build a cocoon to keep her former life and problems at bay and perhaps some self-loathing punishment.<br /> <br />I think that once Melissa sets foot on English soil as Dahlia Western, all is lost for poor Dahlia unless she has some secrets that are yet to be revealed.<br /><br />We must wait for the next episode!<br /><br />--Robert<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-67212661288272018182016-01-25T15:31:06.784+00:002016-01-25T15:31:06.784+00:00Hmmm...
We'll see I guess.Hmmm... <br /><br />We'll see I guess. Emma Finnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02026867289162806363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-55963177023410573702016-01-25T15:17:25.612+00:002016-01-25T15:17:25.612+00:00Interesting idea. My pet theory is that original D...Interesting idea. My pet theory is that original Dahlia will get into an accident (either competely accidental or with the help of Melissa), which will lead to some damage to her face. Melissa, of course, will be too happy to provide the doctors with her original photos to help her restore "her" looks, as well as pay for the reconstructive procedures from "her" pocket. Camille Langtryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16945716778850774065noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-18529160972698276202016-01-25T14:36:31.515+00:002016-01-25T14:36:31.515+00:00I woke up this morning with a revelation of what i...I woke up this morning with a revelation of what is going on inside Emma's evil & twisted mind, no offense! LOL!<br />I of course may be wrong, but as an obscure English detective, S. Holmes, might say let us marshall the facts.<br />We know M has made contact in Bandcock for surgery & made plane reservations, has told Tommy who thinks she's the real D & said she will be returning home soon M delights in torturing the former D & wants to rub home that M is now her living a wonderful life & is beautiful & D is now the pathetic nothing, despised by all. So why hasn't M wanted to see her the last 3 weeks? Here's my guess. In a slight reversal in her plans M is no longer in Greece! She has had the surgery! Now she looks almost identical to the orginal D & is waitng to heal. Then she will go back to D who is stunned & shocked to see M face Y& body now Dahlia's! Make it a fate accomply that there is no going back & D must accepet her new life, have the surgery & take Meliissa place & life or perhps be abandon pennless in Greece with soon no job or food. <br />In re-rading the chapter I've more & more amazed at Emma's skill. Her exporation of D's madness is brilliant. <br />Some telling quotea<br />But I wanted it still. I thrived on it. I was desperate to wallow deeper and deeper in this terrible life.<br />I wanted to be repulsive to others and myself. <br />the other to race as fast as I could toward a total and final immersion in her body and life.<br />to make my face rounder and less like my own!<br /><br />D will be shortly be totally aware of her success! How chilling, soon M's awful life will be her own. I like the smoking it makes D even more lower class & less D's original self than ever & makes her being M even more total somehow. <br />I for one can't wait until the polished & complete novel is avaible! Seldom have I looked forward to a book more. I shouldn't have sai this, damn it, as the evil Emma will now raise the price! LOL!<br /><br />eotten2001https://www.blogger.com/profile/15037344663933155088noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-38983952682492758092016-01-25T14:25:38.193+00:002016-01-25T14:25:38.193+00:00I will attempt to handle it with gusto. I will attempt to handle it with gusto. Emma Finnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02026867289162806363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-35520502887846820572016-01-25T14:11:28.735+00:002016-01-25T14:11:28.735+00:00Finally! Great chapter. The tension is almost unbe...Finally! Great chapter. The tension is almost unbearable. Cant wait to see how you handle the inevitable confrontation.Camille Langtryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16945716778850774065noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-55872159667679053612016-01-25T11:32:35.796+00:002016-01-25T11:32:35.796+00:00Yeah. It's going to be mighty interesting to s...Yeah. It's going to be mighty interesting to see what happens when our two heroines meet next episode... Emma Finnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02026867289162806363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-69672197805337048382016-01-25T11:11:59.940+00:002016-01-25T11:11:59.940+00:00Delighted to see another chapter in the life and h...Delighted to see another chapter in the life and hard times of Dahlia Western but more delighted that it implies that you are feeling better after your health problems. <br /><br />It seems almost that Dahlia is at a point of no return. Without a sympathetic Melissa to help her back to some semblance of normality (and that appears highly unlikely) she won't have the necessary will power to stop eating and lose weight. Giving up smoking is even harder as I know from when I gave up 35 or more years ago.<br /><br />Once again, thank you.<br /><br />Robyn HAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-60733700201162300202016-01-25T08:42:05.227+00:002016-01-25T08:42:05.227+00:00Thanks guys.
As far as the smoking goes, the exp...Thanks guys. <br /><br />As far as the smoking goes, the expanded version of the book will reveal why I put this in. You're now reading on from the expanded outline I've produced for the souped-up version so there may be the odd incongruity like this. <br /><br />Regarding the pace, it must seem frustrating to want to leap ahead and reach that climax but ultimately, as this is a novel effectively, not a short story, it's important that certain elements are established first. We now have Dahlia planning to go to Melissa and ask for a swap. That gives us higher tension knowing that Melissa has other plans. <br /><br />Anyway, enjoy. I'm hoping now to get back on things but don't hold your breath. I'll do my best to get Lady Ann out next and then we'll go back to alternating chapters. Emma Finnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02026867289162806363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8240186143329612112.post-69478547014460534282016-01-25T08:34:24.921+00:002016-01-25T08:34:24.921+00:00Thanks Dave. I don't want to let you guys down...Thanks Dave. I don't want to let you guys down. Emma Finnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02026867289162806363noreply@blogger.com